There are notable differences between a Band 6 and a Band 7 response in the IELTS writing section. Understanding these differences is crucial if you aim to improve your band score from Band 6 to Band 7.

To illustrate these differences, let’s examine a question and two sample responses:

Question:

You were traveling via domestic flight to a place outside your hometown. However, upon reaching your destination, you realized that you had left your travel bag at the airport. Write a letter to the airport authority regarding this incident, including:

– The reason for writing

– How you lost your bag

– The action you are requesting from the authority

Band 6 Answer (with improvements for Band 7):

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to inform you about my lost suitcase during my recent flight.

Last Sunday, I took flight number 464 from Bangalore to Delhi at 10 o’clock in the night. I had a laptop bag and a suitcase with me. I placed them in the cabin, under my seat. Unfortunately, when I left the aircraft, I mistakenly forgot to take my suitcase. I immediately informed your claims officers about the situation.

My suitcase is black in color with the brand name “VIP” printed on the top left corner. It is a new model of a four-wheel trolley bag. Inside, it contains important official documents, including two blue files, two green spiral-bound manuals, a planner from Hilt, an imported pen from Parker, and a few other documents. Additionally, it also contains some clothing items.

I kindly request your urgent assistance in locating my suitcase. Once found, please inform me at the contact number provided so that I can arrange for its collection.

Thank you for your attention to this matter. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Rajesh Verma

(197 words)

In the Band 7 response, improvements were made to enhance the clarity, coherence, and language usage. These changes included:

– Correcting grammar, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation errors

– Using precise language and defining the location of the bag more accurately

– Removing unnecessary phrases or repetitions

– Adding appropriate vocabulary and connecting ideas effectively

– Shortening sentences for better readability

– Making the request more explicit and concise

– Staying within the word limit without compromising essential information

By making these improvements, the Band 7 response achieves a higher level of proficiency and demonstrates a stronger command of vocabulary, grammar, and sentence structure.

Remember, when aiming for a Band 7 response, focus on clarity, accuracy, and effective communication of ideas within the given word limit.