Coherence and cohesion are critical aspects of writing and speaking tasks in the IELTS exam. Unfortunately, many candidates tend to overlook their importance, resulting in lower band scores. To avoid making such mistakes, let’s examine some examples to enhance comprehension.

One common problem in coherence and cohesion is a lack of clear ideas in writing, which can make the topic vague. It is vital to ensure that your writing is clear and precise, allowing the reader or listener to understand your message.

Using appropriate punctuation can significantly impact coherence and cohesion. Long sentences can become complex and confusing. By incorporating punctuations effectively, you can create shorter sentences that flow well, aiding comprehension.

Here’s an example of a paragraph with coherence and cohesion errors:

“According to a group of people, longer prison sentences are necessary for repeat offenders. If they get a longer prison sentence of minimum 20 years for the re-offend they would not indulge in a crime again. There are chances that after increasing the punishment there would be fewer crime cases registered. This is the only way we do not have repeat offenders.”

In this example, the paragraph is composed of only one sentence, making it challenging to follow. The writer’s message is unclear, and certain words are unnecessarily repeated. The conclusion is also repeated in the first and last sentence, lacking cohesion. To improve this paragraph, it should be shorter, clearer, and more concise.

Here’s the corrected version:

“Few people believe that longer prison sentences are necessary for repeated offenders. The idea is that people are much less likely to re-offend if they know that they will receive a serious sentence of perhaps 20 years for any further crimes. This would reform the system with fewer criminals registered with the police. If the punishment isn’t severe enough, the crime rates will remain static.”

In the corrected version, the paragraph is shorter, clearer, and more cohesive. The writer has emphasized the main ideas without unnecessary repetition. Using synonyms sparingly can also enhance coherence.

Tips to improve coherence and cohesion:

1. Be concise and focused in your writing.

2. Ensure clarity by understanding your ideas thoroughly.

3. Avoid unnecessarily long and complex sentences, using punctuation appropriately.

4. Check for repetitions of words and sentences.

To correct faulty sentences:

1. Avoid using unnecessary synonyms.

2. Proofread your writing for logical flow.

3. Review each sentence to check if it supports the main idea.

4. Utilize punctuation effectively where needed.

Now, let’s correct a few more examples:

1. Faulty statement: It is utmost important for you to crack the entrance exam.

Corrected statement: It is essential for you to crack the entrance exam.

2. Faulty statement: Technology will make you learn new things in an easy manner.

Corrected statement: Technology facilitates quick and accessible learning.

Now, try to find and correct the errors in the following paragraphs:

1. For me, the worst thing about waiting tables is the uniform. All the waitresses had to wear this ugly brown striped jumper. The shirts were polyester. Sometimes someone you know comes in. Now I have a job in an office.

2. Credit cards are convenient but dangerous. People often get them to make large purchases easily without saving up lots of money in advance. This is especially helpful for purchases like cars, kitchen appliances, etc., that you may need to get without delay. However, this convenience comes at a high price: interest rates.

3. To begin with, how children are made to grow. The behavior and development of the children are not well looked. You will always see that what the parents teach is what the child will behave. The growing of children is not looked upon well his manners, teachings are low.

By improving coherence and cohesion in your writing and speaking, you can significantly enhance your IELTS band score.