Let’s conduct a thorough analysis of the candidate’s IELTS Writing Task 1 response:

**Candidate’s Response:**

The provided figures illustrate the actions taken by UK graduates and postgraduates who did not enter full-time employment after leaving college in 2008.

To begin with, the majority of graduates (29,665) who did not pursue full-time work opted for further studies. Additionally, a considerable number (16,235) remained unemployed. A slightly higher number than the unemployed (17,735) chose to engage in part-time work, whereas a small proportion showed interest in voluntary work.

On the other hand, a similar scenario was observed with postgraduates, as the majority of them (2,725) opted for further study. A slightly lower number of postgraduates (2,535) engaged in part-time work, while 1,625 postgraduates remained unemployed. A small ratio (345) also expressed interest in voluntary work.

To sum up, the majority of students who did not enter full-time employment after college pursued higher studies, while some chose part-time employment, and a few opted for voluntary work.

**Analysis:**

**Para 1**

**Strength:**

The introductory outline of the question is well-written with no errors.

**Corrected Erroneous Statement:**

[The candidate’s introductory paragraph seems to be correct.]

**Para 2**

**Strength:**

The main key features of the question are highlighted well, along with figures.

**Corrected Erroneous Statement:**

“studies. while, some” should be “studies, while some”, “choose” should be “chose”, “part-time work whereas, a small proportion” should be “part-time work, whereas a small proportion”

**Para 3**

**Strength:**

Sentence connectors (on the other hand) are used, and the key features are again explained well.

**Corrected Erroneous Statement:**

“same scenario was with” can be “same scenario was observed with”

**Para 4**

**Strength:**

Sentence connectors (to sum up, whereas) are used, and a conclusive feature is written.

**Corrected Erroneous Statement:**

“who did not made their career” should be “who did not make their career”, “higher studies. whereas, some choose” should be “higher studies, whereas some chose”

**Expected Band Score: Band 7**

The candidate writes with few errors in grammar and tense. However, there are some mistakes in complex sentence structures and other aspects of grammar. Overall, the response demonstrates a good grasp of the English language, but there is room for improvement in sentence construction and clarity of expression.